One day in new york. Some kids were playing on the knoted gun. they were trying to pull he trigger. there were five kids pushing and pulling with all there might. The maker of the statue wanted to make the gun operationalable for unexplainable resons. With the stregnth of all the kids combined. They got the trigger to move cintemeter by centimeter till...
Bang the gun went off. When the bullet hit the knote in the barrel. The gun exploded there was smake and ash everywhere. The kids were covered in ash. All the kids jaws dropped.
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