Monday, 19 March 2018

Eliana - Term 1 Week 8

It was a bright but cold morning, the birds were chirping, leaves were rustling. In the distance I could hear a weird noise, it sounded like an animal was dying, I decided to run outside and try track down what the weird noise was. I ran down the street towards the city centre, the noise got clearer. suddenly the noise got closer and closer until, something appears, an Ostrich is on the roof of a campervan. I start to panic , I finally take a minute to think about it, I thought to myself ,but how did it get up there.

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