Tuesday, 20 March 2018
Noah S 100 wc wk 8 t1
There was a boy called Billy. He loved to pop fat manus. One day he went to water world. He wanted to pop a manu off the ten meter diving board. He got up there. He was scared he wanted to to come down but he was to scared. He walked to the edge he slipped and back slapped. He went back up to the diving board to do his goal he was to scared. He jumped and popped a really fat manu it went up to the roof everyone was clapping He was so proud of himself. THe end.
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