Early in the morning I was walking the school and I saw a huge crowd looking at a tall building, I wondered why they were there so only see what's going on, then I saw a man at the top of the building. Everyone was shouting “DON'T JUMP!” I was about to say the same thing but then I said “But how did he get up there?” There was no ladder no staircase up, so I just thought it was a prank and left. As soon as they saw me leave they left to. Then I heard “FAKE”
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