Monday, 23 July 2018
T3 W1
We were climbing up a snowy mountain, we had been walking for hours but finally we reached the top. As I looked over the edge of the mountain I saw the most breathtaking sight. It was like I was on top of the world. That very moment the mountain started to shake, it was an earthquake, I knew I had to move. The avalanche was gaining on me and I knew I couldn't out run it. The snow crashed over me and sharp rocks stabbed my leg. At that moment I thought I was going to die. But I never did.
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I really liked how you said "but I never did because it made me think about what happened. next time try to describe the mountain because I thought that it wasn't a snow mountain.
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