Monday, 30 July 2018
T3 W2
It had been raining all morning, the power was out and there was literally nothing to do. My dad was out working and mum was doing the grocery shopping, then there was me stuck at home with no power and nothing to do. I could of gone with mum but I had to babysit my two brothers who can't sit still for a minute and start fighting over the most stupid things. I decided to have a sleep to try pass time. When I woke up it was still only 12pm. "Nooooooooo" I screamed. Could this day get any worse?
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I liked the way you explained the setting and what was happening. Some more descriptive word would have been good. The punctuation was great.
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