Thursday, 26 July 2018
T3 W1
I looked over the edge and then saw a crack on the side and I got scared. It got bigger and then chunks of concrete started coming off and then it cracked along the edge of the dam. I had to go I was scared. I started to run. I started to run and it started to fall behind me> I said to myself I might die. Then it stopped and I was so scared that In would fall. Nek minute I fall. I am falling. I was saying to myself I spoke to soon and to scared to talk and scream. The end.
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I really like the first couple of sentences but the last few don't really make sense. Your punctuation and spelling is really good though.
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