I remember that crazy day. It had been raining all morning but even before mum told me I had a good feeling. I had been sitting in class (totally bored) studying a maths problem when she burst in. I looked up and all I could see was the tears flowing quickly down her face. She gestured wordlessly outside and I followed, my heart beating rapidly. Suddenly she couldn't keep a smile off her face and she said the words I so longed to hear: "Darling I've just won the lotto!" Talk about a shock! All I could say was "Wow!"
Sunday, 29 July 2018
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I like the lead up to the big ending. Maybe a bit more descriptive language.
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