This is possibly the worst day of my life. Actually, it is. My name is Carter and this is how it all went wrong.
It had been raining all morning, and I had been listening to Mr Claire droning on about fractions, Then , over the loudspeaker Principal Luka said "Carter Denning come to my office."
My heart beat fast as I slowly opened the door. Principal Luka smiled and pointed to the chair in front of him.
"Carter, I have some bad news for you. Your parents have both been killed in a gang shootout. I am so sorry"
My heart stopped.
Monday, 30 July 2018
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ReplyDeleteI really liked the descriptive language because it set the scene, I really liked the way you used dialogue, I enjoyed reading this because it kept me hooked, It was especially good when you used their names because it gave it more meaning,I think you need to over read because somethings didn't make sense like "my heart beat fast".
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