Monday, 23 July 2018
Arjan T3 W1
Mum told me never to go over the hedge as its too dangerous, as curiosity killed the cat, it nearly killed me. One day when mum went to work I decided to go over the hedge and see why it's dangerous, so as I looked over the hedge, I saw a forest. The forest looked amazing so I went in to explore. It was super fun until I stepped in a pile of bones, becoming even more curious I went in to investigate. Soon I came face to face with a bear, I ran all the way home away from the hedge.
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I really liked the way you used over the hedge concept and turned it into your own great story. I thought that it painted a really good picture of what was happening in the story but it could of had a little more description. Also Mum needs a capital letter other than that I thought it awesome.
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I really liked your exciting story Arjan! But I think it has to be ...dangerous. So, as......
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