Wednesday, 25 July 2018
Ashleigh W1 T3
As I hopped onto the catamaran, excitement rushed through me, I was glad to be able to swim with fish and the turtles. I got into the water and all the fish started surrounding me, it was incredible. We kept on swimming further out to find a reef and came across some turtles, they were beautiful. We then got told to head back to the boat, I was very disappointed. Sailing back someone yelled DOLPHINS so, as I looked over the edge I saw a school of dolphins, it was magnificent, the were even showing off. This trip was spectacular!
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I really liked the end because it had a little twist to it.
ReplyDeleteI really liked the the way you captivated the audience using great descriptive language in the first line but I thought you could add on ( We kept on swimming out) Out where? What Happened?
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