Sunday, 29 July 2018
Josef T3 W1
As I looked over the edge I saw a seemingly infinite gap between me and the ground. Why did I decide to do this? As I dangle from the rock I was holding onto .my fingers slowly weakening as the tug of war between them and gravity proves almost too much for them. An excruciating death almost certainly awaiting me if I fall. Oh no my fingers are beginning to slide, there's nothing I can do, but wait for an inevitable death. I soon begin to fall …. I am embraced by the soft foam pit that is under the rocks.
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I really loved the use of descriptive words. They really made it great. I also enjoyed it because left a bit of mystery. Although between the onto and my in the first sentence their is a fullstop?
ReplyDeleteI really loved your use of word choice, but i would like to know bit more of what you were doing.
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