Wednesday, 25 July 2018

Max W1T3

So,as I looked over the edge of the jump i saw what was waiting for me.i have mistaken the jump to be much longer but it was a shorter jump then i expected. Not knowing i went a full throttle into the jump and over shot it. Results massive, things broken collarbone and arm,fractured neck, concussion and stuffed for life. My rally car days flashed by one accident. Left me in hospital for 3 and a half weeks. Me, a nurse and a whole hospital room to myself. I guess its to race car manger now. Another to my Motorsports journey.
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  1. Anonymous29 July 2018 at 22:10

    I really like how you the starts of your sentences are different and interesting. You need to remeber a space after a full stop and capital I's!

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  2. Anonymous29 July 2018 at 22:24

    I like the way the way you said 'my rally car days flashed by one accident'.

    Next time remember that every time you use 'I' make sure that it is a capital letter.😄😁👍

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  3. Anonymous30 July 2018 at 22:20

    liked how you put rally car after you put full throttle. next time put something else than stuffed

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  4. Anonymous31 July 2018 at 21:19

    Good descriptive language my g. Love this story. Cant flaw this masterpiece. Chur

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