It was 11:00pm. I had exam tomorrow so I was studying real hard. But my eyes were about to falling asleep so I decided to finish this tomorrow morning. I turned off the light and lied on the bed even though I didn’t brush my teeth. Suddenly, it wasn’t loud, but I heard a moving sound. The sound was coming from under the bed. I touched my arms and I felt my arms were covered in goosebumps. I was really afraid, but I encouraged myself and turned on the light. So, as I looked over the edge, I saw…..!
Monday, 23 July 2018
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really good work I like how you got the readers really wanting to know what happens next
ReplyDeleteI like the way you show your fear. It's very specific.
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