Monday, 30 July 2018
Sang Woo L 100wc T3 W2
I felt bad today. The weather was really bad when I was going to the school. The rain stopped at 12:10pm so I couldn’t go to outside and play. Plus, my teacher gave me so much work to do. When I got back from the school, I started my homework. After I ate dinner, I turned on the TV. The weather reporter said, “........It had been raining all morning in Hamilton today. But luckily, tomorrow is going to be sunny so don’t worry. In Auckland……..” When reporter announced that tomorrow’s weather is going to be fine, I felt relieved.
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very good Sang Woo I loved your sentences they were very put out. next time don't put the ....
ReplyDeleteI loved how you used a shot simple sentence at the start to grab the reader's attention. Maybe use a variety of different words instead of using "bad" a lot.
ReplyDeleteI liked the way you started the day feeling bad and ended up feeling good. Next time remember when you use an ellipsis (...) that it is only three dots. Great job 👍😃😁
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