Thursday, 26 July 2018
t3 w1 Lucas M
One day I was walking with with a friend. when I saw the that the meteor in sky had disappeared. we were excited and worried.we kept on walking when the trial stopped and in front of us was a big hole.so, as I looked over the edge there was a crashed ufo with two giant, purple aliens. I tell my friend to duck down I take photos while he calls the cops. the FBI came and didn't believe us but when they saw the alien they ran like cowards. the FBI circled the aliens and killed them all
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it was very intresting i just think it could have done with a bit more puctuasion
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