Monday, 30 July 2018
T3 W2 100 Word Challenge
Drips of water rolled down my plump cheeks. It had been raining all morning for the first time in a month my friends and I were making the most of it. As we splashed around in the water a cloud of fog surrounded us. All of a sudden something didn't feel right. We started going home but the fog had made us disorientated. We were LOST! Instantly I heard something whispering to itself. I swiftly spun around and I saw there lying on the ground were all my friends. Suddenly I feel an aching pain in my back then...
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Great piece of writing it was gripping and tense. It sounded awesome. Maybe next time make it a bit more informative about whats happening.
ReplyDeleteI like to way you used descriptive words it made it gripping and intense.
ReplyDeleteWhen it says "and I were making the most of it" It doesn't quit make sense.