Tuesday, 1 May 2018
Angus T2W1
John was young when his father died. His family was poor and they didn't have enough money to pay the taxes so one MISTY morning the king's men came down and knocked on johns families door. John answered the door to two men, one of them SHOUTED " is your father home" John said that he was in the mainroom. the two men looked at each other before FRANTICLY barging through the door they took Johns father out the door the two men's faces grinning with CRIMSON. At that moment John knew he would be visiting his father in his GRAVE.
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I really liked the way you started the story off strongly with 'John was young when his father died.
ReplyDeleteNext time remember to do the 'J' in John's name is capital.