My legs felt like jelly, I could hear my heart beating in my chest as I walked towards the principal's office for the first time. The door creaked open as if it belonged to an old house. In the chair opposite the headmaster sat a small girl with long black hair.
"Catherine! I would like you to meet Itana but she said you can call her It" Said Principal Harper.
Oh, I'm just showing someone around, there was nothing to worry about I thought.
"Ok, so when did It arrive?" I asked feeling relieved.
But when I looked over she was gone.
Tuesday, 8 May 2018
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I really like the way you used descriptive language it made you get a good picture in your head.
ReplyDeleteI also really like the way you ended it because it makes people think, where did she go, what happened.
Perhaps you could maybe describe what the office looked like.