Yay! Today morning, my parents announced to me and my brother that they will leave the house and come back tomorrow. Also, they announced to us to do not mess up the house. But after our parents left the house, I called my friends and we started playing video games. After my friends go back to their home, we had some fast foods. Suddenly, I heard sound of the car. I ran to the window to see what's happening. Parent's car! I saw the car arrived!
'When did it arrive?' I said. Then I realised that our house was mess.
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