Monday, 7 May 2018

‘’GET OUT’’ Misty Molo Shouted frantically as she ran to the door to slam it shut. Ollie {being the younger brother }ran to his mum and told her that Misty had kicked her out, but to be fear misty had a good reason. Misty veronica Molo had just been accepted into the highly prestigious School of Granite Hills Institute of the dear , or as the locals called it Granite Hills Institute of the FEAR!! Years ago a grave murder took place within the school gates Legend says it was the Evil principal getting revenge on one of there worse students.

1 comment:

  1. I'm doing comment on yours now Lochie because last week, you didn't put yours on to the blog.

    What a great story! But I think for your last sentence, it is not a 'there' worse students it is a 'their' worse students.

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