Tuesday, 1 May 2018
Nuo T2 W1
We were walking and everything around us was misty because of the dim light.There were many slopes on the road. I almost fell.
The dog was barking at us frantically in a cage, with a crimson light in its eyes. Skulls filled the walls. There were a lot of spider webs in the corners.
It was just like a tomb. I heard someone shouting. I was gravely afraid. I caught my friend's rucksack. She was taken aback. Suddenly we began to run. We saw a ghost drift through.
We saw a mummy jittering. Suddenly we saw bright sky.
Then we went out from the Haunted House.
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I really enjoyed your writing because it was very descriptive and very well written. A work on could be introduction your characters
ReplyDeletecheers william
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed your writing because it was very descriptive.
Perhaps you could change, She was taken aback, to she was taken back and not aback