Tuesday, 1 May 2018

Noah T2 W1

Once there was a boy called jimmy. He wanted to see his granny's GRAVE.
He walked on there the next day then he got chased by a crimson colored snake.
Then one person shouted snake.He was frantically running from the snake.
He tripped up the snake got closer then he got up and started running.
He got home and said to his mom it is a misty day maybe tomorrow then he said to himself if that snakes gone I will.
The next day he went to see his granny's grave and saw the snake again.
THE END
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2 comments:

  1. Anonymous1 May 2018 at 14:32

    I think you need to have a look at your punctuation like commas and not to skip a line after every new idea/sentence. But your main concept is good.

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  2. Anonymous1 May 2018 at 14:35

    it was very exiting and wierd

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