Monday, 7 May 2018
T2 W2 100 WC
There is nothing better than sitting on the edge of the Gold Coast, on the beach eating an ice cream. As I take in the amazing view and the heat of 27 degrees, I hear a 'beep'. Aggh. I thought I knew exactly what it was until I looked at my phone and see it says "It has arrived..." What's that supposed to mean. Unfortunately I have to pick up my phone and reply. "What has arrived and WHEN DID IT ARRIVE?I get a reply. It says "I don't know anything you need to come back to Auckland fast!
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I really liked the way you started this story. I think there was'nt any mistakes in your writing but I want you to use space bar between arrive and I.
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