Monday, 7 May 2018
Angus 100WC T2 W2
"when did it arrive?" I said "about 2 weeks ago" said the town sheriff. We were looking at a huge footprint in the forest and I was going to be the one who was going to solve this mystery because that was my job to solve the biggest mysteries that haunt this planet. The sheriff said that there had been 3 sightings of a huge beast all on the rim of the forest it stays there waiting for its next targets. "Sought of like bigfoot" I said "yes" said the sheriff. Then I felt a sharp pain pierce my flesh the beast had got Its next target.
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I like the piece of writing because it was very descriptive and it made me feel like I was in the story.
ReplyDeleteExciting story Angus. I really enjoyed your writing because I can imagine what is happening.
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