I shouted "CRIMSON MISTY DIG THE GRAVE" It was a disaster, It was mayhem, It happened last night.
It all started when me and my friends Crimson and Misty where walking around in the city. Suddenly we saw smoke, we ran over to the area to see what was going on. It was the Bank someone was robbing it, we went in to stop him but right as we got in he tried to shoot us I guess he was new because he shot himself. We grabbed him and frantically looked for a place to put him.
Tuesday, 1 May 2018
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i think this writing did not have enough detail and it moved a bit fast
ReplyDeletei enjoyed how the start hooked you n to finish reading it.