Monday, 7 May 2018
Ashleigh's 100 WC T2 W2
"Ahhhhhhh, mum when did it arrive?" said Sophie as she raced down the stairs. "Oh, just this morning, after you left for school." "Can I open it?" "No honey, I've told you many times before, you have to wait until your birthday" said mum "But it's only in couples of days!" "No, now that's the end of our conversation". "Fine!". Sophie went back to her bedroom to try and distract herself but nothing worked. 'Hmmmmm, what could it be' Sophie wondered. 'A puppy, a new pair a shoes' Sophie didn't know. All she did then was wait, or did she?
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I really liked the way you made your intro exciting.
ReplyDeleteNext time you write when someone is talking don't have a full stop if you are using an exclamation mark or a question mark.
e.g."But it's only in couples of days!".