Tuesday, 1 May 2018
Harry 100 word challenge term 2 week 1.
It was a dark misty night as John walked past the grave of his mother who had mysteriously perished several years ago. John had enjoyed his long overdue drink at the local pub with his mates. It was deathly silent, John's face was still crimson from when he spilt all the drink's on the rocky surface of the ground in the outdoor section of the pub. John started to get the feeling someone was following him down the dark alleyway. Suddenly four sets of hands lashed out at him. He shouted and struggled frantically but to no avail...darkness.
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Really good writing. I liked the description during the part where John was being kidnapped. It really grasped my attention. Next time make sure to bold the words that we had to use in it so people know what we had to write with. Also, good use of past tense in the second sentence.
ReplyDeleteI really liked the descriptiveness in your story because it wasn't too long of detail. I really like the way you used lashing and mysteriously. I enjoyed reading this it was a great peace...
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