Tuesday, 8 May 2018
Josef 100wc T2 W2
“I am a chicken nugget” said bob the chicken nugget as we walked down the street together. Me and bob drew some weird looks as we walked down the street but we were used to that and I could kind of understand because again, bob was a chicken nugget. As we walked to my house I saw a package “cool my dipping sauce arrived ...when did it arrive?’ I said to Bob, in return Bob said “I dunno I was with you”. When I got inside I prepared a dinner called “Bob and dipping sauce” Bob tasted good.
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I think you need to go over your writing and proof read it ( capital letters and capital I's). I liked the names in the story. They made me laugh.
ReplyDeleteI think you need to work on your grammar and make sure "when did it arrive" is in bold. Overall I really enjoyed that story and how creative it is.
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