Tuesday, 1 May 2018
LucasM 100wc T2 W1
Was a cold and misty morning, there was ten minute left and the score was 2-1 to us and we frantically wanted the whistle to go. suddenly the crimson team were on attack. The striker placed the ball into the top corner the score was 2-2 the whistle went and it went straight penalties. The score in the penalties was 5-5 we were in grave danger of losing this game. I was the last one to take the shot. I placed the ball on the spot and stood back, the crowd shouted and cheered I run in and shoot.
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I loved the idea and the way you write it such as the descriptive words but you should check your capital letters and that it makes sense.
ReplyDeleteI really liked the way that you wrote, exciting football mathch. But I can see some sentences doesn't make sense because you didn't put full stop or commas.
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