Monday, 7 May 2018
Mahina 100WC T2W2
I'm lying in bed all snuggled down in my warm cozy bed when all of a sudden my alarm clock goes off. I'd like to stay in bed but when you live in australia it gets far too hot to practice netball in midday. I drag myself out of bed and start to get ready. I run down to the kitchen, shove some weet-bix down my throat and run outside and start warming up. soon after I hear my mum calling me inside. I walk inside and she is holding an envelope in her hand. "When did it get here!"
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It's a nice piece of work but I didn't understand the last bit, it was just a bit random.And you should also have a question mark instead of a exclamation mark. but It flows nicely and there is lots of detail.
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