Tuesday, 1 May 2018

Mahina T2W1

I was already running late for the party and when you are at high school and you show up to a party late it is like committing a crime. Frantically I grabbed my jumper and ran out the door. I decided to take a short cut past the grave. "You'll be fine", I tell myself. The misty grave made me feel uncomfortable. All of a sudden out of the corner of my eye I saw a crimson thick liquid oozing out of the ground. my mind shouted at me to run but I was frozen in fear and couldn't move.
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  1. Anonymous1 May 2018 at 14:32

    i enjoyed reading this beacuse of the way you used lots of disciptived word that made it exiting

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  3. Anonymous1 May 2018 at 14:50

    I liked it the ending was cool great piece of writting

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