Monday, 7 May 2018
100WC W2T2 Jacob
As I got home from school one day I saw all my friends huddled around my doorstep. As I got closer I saw they were looking at a box. Once I reached them I asked ''When did it arrive?". They all shrugged their shoulders. I guess they were as confused as I was. We took the box inside and opened it. At first we saw nothing but we soon noticed that there at the bottom of the box was a large spider. Suddenly the spider started to grow until eventually it was human size. Then it turned to me and...
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i really liked your writing because it was gripping next time use more descriptive words.
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