Sunday, 12 August 2018
100 WC T3 W4 Harry
My ears are still throbbing from the pumping music of my mates house, it had been a wild night but I was making my way home to get some sleep. It was just as I rounded a corner I heard almost an silent whisper echo in the still night. A gunshot? From the alleyway? I must see. There she was the body of a sprawled figure was strewn across the floor. A phone and gun next to her. " So there you go, that's the story". I mutter in the cold grey space. "Why would I do that".?
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I really enjoyed the way you used descriptive adjectives, next time you write maby use some dialogue
ReplyDeleteI really liked all the adjectives you used
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