As I read the contents of the letter, I was aware of the smile on my face. The writer -Alanna Aarts- had gotten straight to the point. It went like this....
Dear Maia Rhys-Davies,
You have been selected for the NZ equestrian youth talent ID squad that will be flying to Australia to compete in a friendly competition with the Australian team.
You will be able to choose one pony to take over with you.
Dates of the competition will be sent to you at a later notice.
Yours sincerely,
Alanna Aarts
Finally all my hard work had paid off!
Monday, 20 August 2018
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I really liked this piece of writing because of how informative it was. I found it easy to engage with. Next time try to use more descriptive language.
ReplyDeleteI really like the different way you wrote this, it really engages with the audience. I would recommend for you to use a tad more descriptive language.
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