"Hurry up," I screeched from the bottom of the old
stairs to my slightly older brother Nate. Tonight we were going into the forest! I was excited but slightly
nervous too. A few hours later we were sitting down by the raging fire, eating
cooked fish we'd caught from up at the nearby
river. I took in a breath of fresh air, glancing up and instantly gasped. The sky was a stunning
pink colour! Mezmerised I called for Nate to have a look. Together we sat just watching the sky. I certainly wasn't going to forget this in a hurry!
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