It was an ordinary day at the police station. Then a phone call came through. There was a crying mother at the other end of the line, saying "my son Zach had been MURDERED." The police quickly rush out to the scene. Finally the police had retrieved the body, they head back to the station to start investigating. After an hour of going through Zacs emails, the finally get a suspect... Zacs best friend Jake. So they call Jake in so that they can ask some questions. The investigator questions Jake. And Jake keeps replying "why would I do that".
I enjoyed reading this because it kept me hooked, maybe next time you write use some dialogue
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