Wednesday, 1 August 2018
liam t3 w2
Hi my name is John I'm a pretty average life at least I think I am I went outside to play football that night I took off my jumper I chucked it into the goal then I hit the ball when suddenly the ball bounces off the crossbar onto my face and before you knew it I was on the on the wet grass I felt water drops it is starting to rain I ran inside and went to sleep I woke up in the morning it had been raining all morning wait I leave my jacket outside... I ran outside and got my jacket the end
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