Wednesday, 1 August 2018
Nuo 100WC T3W2
It had been raining all morning,The weather finally cleared up after noon.The sunlight shone on the raindrops left on the glass, shining brightly.Gradually, the water on the platform outside the window was dried by the sun, leaving a gray water mark.With the sound of pong, a beautiful black bird hit the window pane.I was startled by the fact that I was fascinated by the novel.I got out of bed (because the weather was so good that I didn't get out of bed in a day) and opened the floor window and walked onto the platform. I saw that the poor bird was climbing up, and then flew away.
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I like the way you said "The sunlight shone on the raindrops left on the glass, shining brightly". Next time try and remember that there is always a space after a full stop. Great job 👍😃😁
ReplyDeleteliked how you described morning and how good the day was. next time think about not describe the morning the whole way through the story.
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