Monday, 13 August 2018
Emma T2 W4
It was just an ordinary day at Waikato Diocesan school for girls. I was just entering the warm fresh air that filled my classroom, I scanned the area to find my friend Bella, who was sitting in the corner waving frantically at me. But as I sat down I asked "who do you like B" as Bella stared at me she finally said "do you promise not to tell anyone" shocked I said "why would I do that"?. As bella was about to tell me, we heard "Bella and Lily NO TALKING"! and so I never did find out.
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The time and background are very detailed and the story is perfect.
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