Wednesday, 29 August 2018
Emma T3 W6
Dark, blue thick clouds surrounded the weak brick lighthouse, as huge powerful waves smashed into its sides, making piece of bricks shatter into the monster sea. The dark dangerous ocean became strong and treacherous rips formed all around the lonely lighthouse. Suddenly the waves were like tsunamis, the thunder began to roar like thousands of lions, and the lighthouse could not fight back and collapsed.
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