Sunday, 19 August 2018
100WC T3 W5
I never wanted to move but I guess I never had a choice. My dad hasn't had a job for years and so when he got one he took it, even if it meant moving. I miss my friends and I want to be with them. What's worse is that none of them have sent me any letter. I check and there is nothing. Until today. For the first time since we moved here a letter with the name 'Hilton Crest' has arrived. As I read the contents of the letter, I am aware of the smile on my face.
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nice work used bold for the sentense so we know where it is
ReplyDeleteI really liked your story because I think your story matches with the sentence really well.
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