"Get up Clara! I don't have time for this," shouted mum from the hallway.
"Sorry," I say quietly as I step out of my bedroom door just to be knocked back in by Sarah running past.
"Out of my way, midget," she shouts.
I walks down the stairs and end up tripping down half the flight. What a bad start.
When I reach the kitchen, Bella was sitting there eating her organic oatmeal. Without thinking I accidentally pour orange juice into my cereal instead of milk.
"Why would I do that?" I think to myself.
What a bad morning!
Tuesday, 14 August 2018
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Your segmentation is very clean, using a lot of dialogue description, linking the story.
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