Monday, 13 August 2018

100 WC W4 T3

The plane went down at 3:30pm. It's only Will and I. it is 6 o’clock the next day.
We haven't found water or a good supply of food. Will said "I should drink my own pee."

I replied "why would I do that, there will be water around.
" He stood his ground and said "if we keep looking we will get thirstier."
He wouldn't change his mind. I could see he was tired so I told him
"you should rest as I go and try to find water."
So he took a seat and rested. As I persevered on.

1 comment:

  1. I really like this story line. Could you please at the Speech Mark at the beginning of the second line in the second paragraph, and some capitals. Other than that, Well done.

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