Monday, 20 August 2018

T3 W5


One day I was playing outside, when suddenly the cows flew in to the air and got sucked into a massive tornado. It was headed toward my house.
I quickly head to the underground bunker where it would be safe. I was smashed against the wall hard and my vision turned black. I could not see anything until i woke up.

I was in some sort of hospital and there was a table next to me. There was a letter on it. As i read the letter i was aware of the smile on my face. My family is ok.
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  1. Anonymous21 August 2018 at 00:16

    I really like the explosive drama that you put into your story because it gave it feeling. maby next time you write try add some dialogue

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