Tuesday, 21 August 2018

Harriet T3 W5

It was a sunny morning in Coatesville. I got out of bed to go feed the chickens. All of a sudden I realize that I will have a letter from Harvard, saying if I got in or not. I quickly sprint down to the letter box. My hands are trembling as I open the letter box. I open the letter. And as I read the contents of the letter, I am aware of the smile on my face. I had just made it into Harvard University. I run back inside and tell mum and dad. They were pleased for me.
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  1. Anonymous22 August 2018 at 23:09

    This is a great goal, but please don't forget the tense.

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