Sunday, 12 August 2018
100 Word Challenge T3 W4
The drop to the water was over 50 meters so even if you didn't hit the rocks or an overgrown branch on the way down you were almost guaranteed to die, and if you just happen to get intensely lucky and only break a couple of bones then I am almost positive that those sharks would gobble you up in an instant. So really the only good thing is you get to feed the wildlife! So I turned back to my friend and asked him, "why would I do that?'." Why would I jump off a deadly cliff!"
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I really enjoyed the way you portrayed the cliff and the drop. I can suggest that you read through the second sentence, and maybe could you add some more Punctuation, mainly comers
ReplyDeletePerhaps you could work on the start
ReplyDeleteI really like the detail in the start, I could imagine the scene in my head. I would just shorten down the first sentence, add more punctuation. Overall the story was great.
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