Monday, 13 August 2018
100 Words Week 4 Term 3
Walking through the forest, walking... That's all that's happened for the past half hour. Pretty Boring. We found a nice area to set up camp. We started building the camp. This could be home for a while. We'd been here for a while now, the area we chose was beside a river. High enough up that we couldn't get flooded. I threw some rocks out into the water, SLAP! CRUNCH! The bank suddenly landed in the water. "why did you do that!?" my friend asks. "Why would I do that?!" I say. It was getting darker, almost had no food left
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I really liked the story and the detail that you had of where you were camping. Next time you could have more of a finished ending, 'almost had no food left'... what's going to happen next?
ReplyDeleteI really like the story as it flowed together well. Maybe next time add some more description. What time of day was it when you left? How did you feel once you arrived at your destintaion?
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