Saturday, 4 August 2018
Harriet T3 W2
It was a Saturday morning in New Zealand, and it had been raining all morning non stop. It all started when I woke up, opened the curtains and saw my cow, Daisy been rushed away by a flood. I quickly put on my gumboots and rushed outside to help my poor cow. I started running like a headless chicken. Then I saw a branch. I quickly jumped for the brunched. I bent down and I grabbed the halter of my cow. Once she was fine I took her back to the stables. Once that was done I go back inside and say "what a day".
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I love the story line , it really hooks you in to the story. I would just double check some grammar. Overall though it was a great story.
ReplyDeleteThat poor Cow! I really like this story. You painted the picture for me with the descriptive language, like 'Running around like a headless chicken.' I would check some spelling and Grammar, for example: "Once she was fine" and "Once". Otherwise, I really liked it :))
ReplyDeleteI liked how you constructed the story
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