Tuesday, 21 August 2018
100WC T3 W5
School seemed to take forever. We had an hour of maths and my maths teacher blabbered on for ages. On top of that we had P.E. I hate P.E, it gets you sweaty and Mr Kidd is always shouting in your ear. I always try my best to go far in life but P.E certainly won't get me anywhere. When I finally got home Mum gave me a letter. As I read the contents of the letter, I was aware of the smile on my face. My eyes swelled up with tears. I got a scholarship to St Peters.
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I really liked this piece of writing because it was informative and easy to understand, good grammar too. Next time you could use more descriptive language.
ReplyDeleteI really like this story. I will suggest that you check 'Your' ear. Otherwise, Well done :))
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